I wouldn't say great tutorial, okay would be a better description. The
wording and structure of your paragraphs is repetitive and unorganized
but that's probably because you haven't yet learned about
instructional/tutorial writing in school (you look to be about middle
school age).
TAKEN.[/B]
WHY DO YOU RECOMMEND THE SUN OVER THE
TORKER
LX (\"HTTP://BRANDSCYCLE.COM/ITEMDETAILS.CFM?ID=4569\")? THE TORKER LX IS
ONLY ABOUT $30 MORE (PROBABLY LESS WHEN YOU
FACTOR IN THE FREE ****PPING) AND YOU GET AN ARGUABLY BETTER UNICYCLE
THAT MOST IM****TANTLY HAS A HANDLE.
*I AGREE, CHANGED
Also, instead of just hyperlinking the Nimbus ISIS as "this" you should
write out "Nimbus ISIS" and tell people why it's more money and why
they might consider going for that instead of the Sun or Torker.
[B]Read the image notes, but i will write some more*
Your suggestion of buying a unicycle that has your leg slightly bent
when the pedals are vertical is good advice, but you should also tell
people that the seat height is adjustable and that when they buy a
unicycle they will most likely have to cut down the seatpost.
*taken*
I really don't think that you should have been wearing flip-flops when
you took those pictures. When you can ride a unicycle, flip-flops
aren't a big deal if you aren't doing much more than just riding, but
when you're learning, flip-flops are a big mistake.
*Hehe, noted
* You advocate use of a helmet, yet in none of the pictures are you
wearing one.
*Yes, i realized that after the fact. Again, check image notes too.
*
It also should have been mentioned to a get a skate style helmet so
that there is protection for the back of the head.
*Taken*
Also, you forgot one of the most im****tant pieces of safety gear for
learning, and even as you progress, knee/****n protection. Nobody will
want to continue learning to unicycle if the first day gave them
bruises or pedal bites all over their ****ns.
*Hmmm, plastic pedals dont bite, but ill add to it.*
What do you get for winning the contest? If you want to win don't
advertise that you want votes, if you have a good enough tutorial
people will vote for you anyways.
*Taken, you win a sweet bike tool and a ****rt!
My instructable was featured on the site woo!!!!*
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vanpaun
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